Obsession and desire Reviews

This could have been a good story, but the use of the wrong pronouns has made it very difficult to follow properly. The story also makes mention of Andy's short term memory issues and his obsessive compulsion but doesn't make the effort to delve into what happened or brought that on early in the story. I also find it odd that for Camille a girl who lost her virginity to Andy but he didn't know, would so easily and quickly give of herself to other men when she's trying to get over him. So much potential lost in a story that good editing could have fixed.